[Clas12_verystrange] [EXTERNAL] Re: [Clas_hadron] Gordon Research Conference Poster

Wed Jul 27 11:32:58 EDT 2022

Hi Achyut:

Starting with Dan's comments...

  1.  Abstract: "No statistically significant $\Xi^{*-}$ is not technically correct; the 1530 state is a Xi*.
  2.  Motivation: instead of "There are many more...experimentally", I would turn it around, saying "There are far fewer experimentally observed Cascade states than have been predicted".  Note that this is, literally, a part of the "missing baryon" problem; your second bullet point is redundant.
  3.  Early Experiments: The second plot you show, from the Goetz paper you cite, also includes data from the g11 measurement by Guo (PRC 76, 025208).  You might want to make Lei happy and cite this as well.
  4.  CLAS12 RGA Experiment: the items in your bullet points are set off from the text by "::"; it should be ":".  This isn't C++ code.  Also, you ought to mention exactly how much data there is, at least by mentioning how much total charge was incident on the target.  Otherwise, it would be hard to say what running conditions you would need to improve the measurement.
  5.  Missing Mass Spectra: "Bg" is an unusual abbreviation for "background".  "BG" (all caps) or "bkgd" is more standard.  In any event, it should be exactly the same as you have on the figure (which is "bck" here, and in the "Signal yield" section).
  6.  MC Simulation: "width" is in a different font from the rest of the text.
  7.  Signal Yield: the linebreaks are not helping you here.  This would be helped significantly if you made the figures smaller, and put them on the same line (as you did in the "Missing Mass Spectra" section).

John

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Subject: Re: [Clas_hadron] Gordon Research Conference Poster

Achyut,

Your poster is very nice and seems well laid out and complete to me. A few suggestions from my
side:

1) Title:
 - Capitalize "Using".
 - Add electric charge of Sigma (i.e. $\Sigma^0$).

2) Abstract:
 - Capitalize "Very Strange".
 - Use $\Sigma^0$, not $\Sigma 0$. (multiple places throughout)
 - Use "... with an electron beam energy ...".
 - Use "Forward Detector".
 - Use "Forward Tagger".
 - Use "CLAS detector with nearly 4$\pi$ solid angle coverage is used ...".
 - Use "... in the final state. $\Lambda/\Sigma^0$ hyperons ..." (note space after period).
 - Use "... in the $e'K^+K^+$ missing mass ...".
 - Next to last line, it looks like reaction is not in bold font, but it is elsewhere?
 - Last line, use "... electroproduction processes.".

3) Motivation:
 - Use ... predicted Cascade states than have been seen experimentally.".

4) Early Experiments on Cascade search:
 - Capitalize "Search" in title of this section.
 - Use "low sensitivity".
 - Missing a period on last bullet.
 - Add "(CLAS Collaboration)" to Goetz reference.

5) CLAS12 RGA Experiment:
 - Use "RG-A".
 - Use "longitudinally polarized" (no capitalization on longitudinally).
 - Note: the magnets are not used "for tracking", they enable a momentum measurement utilizing
   tracking detectors to measure the curvature of the charged track in the field.
 - Here you do not end the bullets with a period as you did in the other sections.

6) DATA Analysis Strategy:
 - Use "Data" in title (not capitalizing all the letters).
 - Here you end some bullets with a period and some not. (Actually, be consistent in all sections).
 - Last bullet has a spurious space before the period.

7) Charged Kaon selection:
 - Capitalize "Selection" in the title.

8) Background shape in ...:
 - Capitalize "Shape" and "Events" in title.

9) MC Simulation:
 - Typo on "tuning".

10) Signal yield/Statistical significance":
 - Capitalize "Yield" and "Significance" in the title.

11) Preliminary cross sections ...:
 - Capitalize "Cross", "Section", "Upper", and "Limit".
 - Units should be in roman font, not italics.
 - Use "... as a function of the $\Xi^{* -}$ mass ...".

12) Summary:
 - "pass1" is jargon. Perhaps say "... was observed from the preliminary data analysis using ...".
 - Use "... the low-$Q^2$ and high-$Q^2$ electroproduction processes."

Regards,
Daniel

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On Jul 26, 2022, at 4:09 PM, Achyut Khanal <akhanal at jlab.org<mailto:akhanal at jlab.org>> wrote:

Hi,

I am presenting the attached poster at the Gordon Research Conference. I would appreciate your comments/suggestions.

Thank you for your time.

Sincerely,
Achyut Khanal
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