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<div class="">Your poster is very nice and seems well laid out and complete to me. A few suggestions from my</div>
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<div class="">1) Title:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Using".</div>
<div class=""> - Add electric charge of Sigma (i.e. $\Sigma^0$).</div>
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<div class="">2) Abstract:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Very Strange".</div>
<div class=""> - Use $\Sigma^0$, not $\Sigma 0$. (multiple places throughout)</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... with an electron beam energy ...".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "Forward Detector".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "Forward Tagger".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "CLAS detector with nearly 4$\pi$ solid angle coverage is used ...".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... in the final state. $\Lambda/\Sigma^0$ hyperons ..." (note space after period).</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... in the $e'K^+K^+$ missing mass ...".</div>
<div class=""> - Next to last line, it looks like reaction is not in bold font, but it is elsewhere?</div>
<div class=""> - Last line, use "... electroproduction processes.".</div>
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<div class="">3) Motivation:</div>
<div class=""> - Use ... predicted Cascade states than have been seen experimentally.".</div>
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<div class="">4) Early Experiments on Cascade search:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Search" in title of this section.</div>
<div class=""> - Use "low sensitivity".</div>
<div class=""> - Missing a period on last bullet.</div>
<div class=""> - Add "(CLAS Collaboration)" to Goetz reference.</div>
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<div class="">5) CLAS12 RGA Experiment:</div>
<div class=""> - Use "RG-A".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "longitudinally polarized" (no capitalization on longitudinally).</div>
<div class=""> - Note: the magnets are not used "for tracking", they enable a momentum measurement utilizing</div>
<div class=""> tracking detectors to measure the curvature of the charged track in the field.</div>
<div class=""> - Here you do not end the bullets with a period as you did in the other sections.</div>
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<div class="">6) DATA Analysis Strategy:</div>
<div class=""> - Use "Data" in title (not capitalizing all the letters).</div>
<div class=""> - Here you end some bullets with a period and some not. (Actually, be consistent in all sections).</div>
<div class=""> - Last bullet has a spurious space before the period.</div>
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<div class="">7) Charged Kaon selection:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Selection" in the title.</div>
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<div class="">8) Background shape in ...:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Shape" and "Events" in title.</div>
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<div class="">9) MC Simulation:</div>
<div class=""> - Typo on "tuning".</div>
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<div class="">10) Signal yield/Statistical significance":</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Yield" and "Significance" in the title.</div>
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<div class="">11) Preliminary cross sections ...:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Cross", "Section", "Upper", and "Limit".</div>
<div class=""> - Units should be in roman font, not italics.</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... as a function of the $\Xi^{* -}$ mass ...".</div>
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<div class="">12) Summary:</div>
<div class=""> - "pass1" is jargon. Perhaps say "... was observed from the preliminary data analysis using ...".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... the low-$Q^2$ and high-$Q^2$ electroproduction processes."</div>
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<div class="">Regards,</div>
<div class="">Daniel</div>
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<div class="">On Jul 26, 2022, at 4:09 PM, Achyut Khanal <<a href="mailto:akhanal@jlab.org" class="">akhanal@jlab.org</a>> wrote:</div>
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<div class="">I am presenting the attached poster at the Gordon Research Conference. I would appreciate your comments/suggestions. </div>
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<div class="">Thank you for your time. </div>
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<div class="">Sincerely,</div>
<div class="">Achyut Khanal</div>
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