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Thank you Daniel and John for your comments and suggestions. I have updated my poster accordingly.
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<li class=""><span class="">Abstract: "No statistically significant $\Xi^{*-}$ is not technically correct; the 1530 state is a Xi*.</span></li><li class=""><span class="">Motivation: instead of "There are many more...experimentally", I would turn it around, saying "There are far fewer experimentally observed Cascade states than have been predicted". Note that this is, literally, a part of the "missing
baryon" problem; your second bullet point is redundant.</span></li><li class=""><span class="">Early Experiments: The second plot you show, from the Goetz paper you cite, also includes data from the g11 measurement by Guo (PRC 76, 025208). You might want to make Lei happy and cite this as well.</span></li><li class=""><span class="">CLAS12 RGA Experiment: the items in your bullet points are set off from the text by "::"; it should be ":". This isn't C++ code. Also, you ought to mention exactly how much data there is, at least by mentioning how much total charge
was incident on the target. Otherwise, it would be hard to say what running conditions you would need to improve the measurement.<br class="">
</span></li><li class=""><span class="">Missing Mass Spectra: "Bg" is an unusual abbreviation for "background". "BG" (all caps) or "bkgd" is more standard. In any event, it should be exactly the same as you have on the figure (which is "bck" here, and in the "Signal
yield" section).</span></li><li class=""><span class="">MC Simulation: "width" is in a different font from the rest of the text.</span></li><li class=""><span class="">Signal Yield: the linebreaks are not helping you here. This would be helped significantly if you made the figures smaller, and put them on the same line (as you did in the "Missing Mass Spectra" section).<br class="">
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<b class="">To:</b><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span>Achyut Khanal <<a href="mailto:akhanal@jlab.org" class="">akhanal@jlab.org</a>><br class="">
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<div class="">Your poster is very nice and seems well laid out and complete to me. A few suggestions from my</div>
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<div class="">1) Title:</div>
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<div class=""> - Add electric charge of Sigma (i.e. $\Sigma^0$).</div>
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<div class="">2) Abstract:</div>
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<div class=""> - Use $\Sigma^0$, not $\Sigma 0$. (multiple places throughout)</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... with an electron beam energy ...".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "Forward Detector".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "Forward Tagger".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "CLAS detector with nearly 4$\pi$ solid angle coverage is used ...".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... in the final state. $\Lambda/\Sigma^0$ hyperons ..." (note space after period).</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... in the $e'K^+K^+$ missing mass ...".</div>
<div class=""> - Next to last line, it looks like reaction is not in bold font, but it is elsewhere?</div>
<div class=""> - Last line, use "... electroproduction processes.".</div>
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<div class="">3) Motivation:</div>
<div class=""> - Use ... predicted Cascade states than have been seen experimentally.".</div>
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<div class="">4) Early Experiments on Cascade search:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Search" in title of this section.</div>
<div class=""> - Use "low sensitivity".</div>
<div class=""> - Missing a period on last bullet.</div>
<div class=""> - Add "(CLAS Collaboration)" to Goetz reference.</div>
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<div class="">5) CLAS12 RGA Experiment:</div>
<div class=""> - Use "RG-A".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "longitudinally polarized" (no capitalization on longitudinally).</div>
<div class=""> - Note: the magnets are not used "for tracking", they enable a momentum measurement utilizing</div>
<div class=""> tracking detectors to measure the curvature of the charged track in the field.</div>
<div class=""> - Here you do not end the bullets with a period as you did in the other sections.</div>
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<div class="">6) DATA Analysis Strategy:</div>
<div class=""> - Use "Data" in title (not capitalizing all the letters).</div>
<div class=""> - Here you end some bullets with a period and some not. (Actually, be consistent in all sections).</div>
<div class=""> - Last bullet has a spurious space before the period.</div>
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<div class="">7) Charged Kaon selection:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Selection" in the title.</div>
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<div class="">8) Background shape in ...:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Shape" and "Events" in title.</div>
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<div class="">9) MC Simulation:</div>
<div class=""> - Typo on "tuning".</div>
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<div class="">10) Signal yield/Statistical significance":</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Yield" and "Significance" in the title.</div>
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<div class="">11) Preliminary cross sections ...:</div>
<div class=""> - Capitalize "Cross", "Section", "Upper", and "Limit".</div>
<div class=""> - Units should be in roman font, not italics.</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... as a function of the $\Xi^{* -}$ mass ...".</div>
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<div class="">12) Summary:</div>
<div class=""> - "pass1" is jargon. Perhaps say "... was observed from the preliminary data analysis using ...".</div>
<div class=""> - Use "... the low-$Q^2$ and high-$Q^2$ electroproduction processes."</div>
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<div class="">Regards,</div>
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