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Dear Cathrina,<br>
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Here are a few comments about your abstract.<br>
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You need a title, first and foremost.<br>
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The first sentence should be something that tells the reader
something about what you actually did, not a bland statement about
CLAS in general.<br>
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"photon scattering" is not correct word usage. You are not
scattering photons. Probably you want to use the word
"photoproduction". This second sentence would be better if you use
it as your first sentence. <br>
<br>
"The main goal..." sentence can be removed: it is content free.<br>
<br>
"...gluonic bound state, because..." remove the comma. If you
were writing in German it would be appropriate, but not in English
usage. <br>
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Cheers,<br>
Reinhard<br>
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On 12/10/2015 02:22 AM, Cathrina Sowa wrote:
<blockquote cite="mid:56692850.8030306@ep1.ruhr-uni-bochum.de"
type="cite">Hello,
<br>
<br>
I would like to attent the DPG2016. It is a national german
Conference and it would be a contributing talk of 12+3 min.
<br>
I attached an abstract and would be happy about comments.
<br>
<br>
Thank you.
<br>
<br>
Best regards
<br>
Cathrina
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