[G12] comments for my Hadron09 talk

[Dennis Weygand]

Here are my comments:
Generally well-done, specifically, add specifics when you can...


1) slide #4 
	bullet 3: expand or quantify 'predicted level'
	bullet 4: add the actual upper limit quoted

2) slide #5
	bullet 2: compare actual event counts (expected) to E852 and g6c

3) slide #8 
	bullet 1: Is there supposed to be a comma after 'First'?
	bullet 2: what does this mean?

4) slide #9
	bullet 2: 1 ns doesn't mean much to most of your audience, better to say 'same accelerator rf bucket', which, while perhaps less precise, is much clearer.
	
5) slide #10
	bottom plot: (this is just a suggestion) mark a2 and p1/p2 regions with arrows (you may want to expand the data regions: there is a lot of white space at high and low masses on these plots)
	Generally: what is the fraction of the data that this represents?

6) slide 13
	nobody but CLAS people know what 'pass 1' means: and also it implies a pass 2 (3,4,5 etc). In my opinion it is better to simply say something like:
	'Finish reconstruction (by 1/1/2010)'
	'Yield concerns' appear nowhere else in your (written) talk: can you update me on the current status?

Dennis





On Nov 24, 2009, at 9:49 PM, Craig Bookwalter wrote:

> Hi folks,
>    I'd appreciate it very much if all would take a look at my talk for 
> Hadron 09 and let me know about any concerns. It is located here:
> 
>    http://www.jlab.org/Hall-B/secure/g12/talks/craig_hadron09.pdf
> 
>    As always, be sure to view it with Adobe Reader to see all the 
> plots. The slide with the Dalitz plots is animated--click on the plots 
> to advance the mass bins.
> 
> I will not be able to attend the meeting tomorrow (if any) so please 
> forward all comments to the list. Many thanks in advance!
> 
> Craig
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