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<div class="moz-cite-prefix">Hi Dan,<br>
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The abstract contains the relevant information, but some sentence
are a little awkward. I suggest the following<br>
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1. Shorten first sentence: ...GlueX experiment is a lead glass
elecromagnetic calorimeter...<br>
2. As the first sentence states the detector is under
construction, you can simplify: "GlueX is a photoproduction
experiment...."<br>
3. Add a phrase immediately before "Each element consists..." to
give the number of blocks such as: " The calorimeter is built out
of 2800 elements, each of which consist of a lead glass block...."<br>
<br>
Cheers, Elton.<br>
<pre class="moz-signature" cols="72">Elton Smith
Jefferson Lab MS 12H5
12000 Jefferson Ave STE 16
Newport News, VA 23606
(757) 269-7625
(757) 269-6331 fax </pre>
On 6/28/13 1:25 PM, Daniel Bennett wrote:<br>
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have attached the abstract for the FCAL talk, which I will be
presenting at the DNP2013 conference. Any comments would be
appreciated.</div>
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