[Primex] draft text for pi0 PRL

[Stepan Stepanyan]

Hi Ashot,

Here are my few comments on the paper draft :

- seems like author list has lead authors and rest. I think  your name 
should be
in lead author list
- having your final results displayed at the beginning of the paper, 
Fig.1, before
describing the experiment is not good. Consider moving Fig. 1 to the 
last. You
refer to it for previous experimental results, but there are references 
already, so
no need to show them.
- you can combine Fig. 2 and Fig. 3 in one as (a) and (b). As was 
pointed out
5 figures are too much for PRL
- reference to Table II comes before reference to Table I. As pointed 
out, you really
do not need Table II. Just remove it.
- reference [15] points to Primex web page, it is hard to find 
information that referred
to on that page. Make it more direct
- there are phrases "Primakoff type experiments" and "Primakoff type of 
experiments.
I think the first is correct. Remove "of" from at in two places page 2
- equations are not numbered, in the first one you have not exact 
equations. Cross
section = to square sum of amplitudes and a cross section. At least 
should be coefficient
in front of amplitude sum, is not it?
- on page 2, second paragraph, line 6, "collimator were used" should be 
"collimator WAS used"
- on page 3, second paragraph, second sentence is a repetition of what 
is already pointed
out before, remove it
- on page 3, second paragraph, lines 10-11, "... in both the targets" 
should be "... in both targets"

Regards, Stepan

Ashot Gasparian wrote:
>
>   Since many people could not access the primex secure wiki page,
>   here in the attachment is the current draft of the pi0
>   Phys. Rev. Letter text.
>
>   It is still a draft, please send me your comments before the
>   Monday's collaboration meeting.
>
>  Thanks,
>  Ashot
>
>
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