[Qweak_transverse_prl_comments] Fwd: [Qweak_bnssa_elastic_ep_authors] Final draft of the elastic ep transverse paper - Comments due by October 17th, 2014

[Buddhini Waidyawansa]

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From: Stephen Wood <saw at jlab.org>
Date: Sat, Oct 11, 2014 at 8:53 PM
Subject: Re: [Qweak_bnssa_elastic_ep_authors] Final draft of the elastic ep
transverse paper - Comments due by October 17th, 2014
To: buddhini at jlab.org


Buddhini:

I have attached some comments.

Steve

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L20  "weak" should be roman.  Subscripts and superscripts that are
words or abbreviations should not be in math mode.
Do      $Q_{\text{weak}}$
Also, should the Q be in math mode or roman?  Be consisten with PRL
and NIM.

L59-61: More precise that Qweak? 

L64-66: Not clear to me what is independent of hadronic structure

L66: dependance -> dependence

L69: "c" in GeV/c needs to be in math mode

L75: Here you say "Rosenbluth-Polarization", later (L79) you don't
capitilize polarization.

L78: have -> has

L82: c -> math mode

L85: radius -> radii

L88: ep -> $ep$

L91: What is "a"?  Do you mean to say "approximately" instead of "a ="

L96: Use $ep$ $\mu p$

L98: "Without account of" -> "Without accounting for" ??

L106: "from the" -> "from"

Eq 1:  \text{spins}
       Is Abs the right notation.  Should it be Abs(M^gg) or |M^gg| ???

L111: DVVS not DVCS?
      What about DDVCS?  Is the virtual compton scattering you are
      talking about not deep?

L115: dependance -> dependence

L116: calculations -> calculation

L125: \text{weak}

L126: \text{weak}

L132: I think it is better to use CEBAF rather than TJNAF.  TJNAF is the whole
      lab, CEBAF is the accelerator.

L135: \text{A}   $\mu \text{A}$
      Also say 150-180 uA, not 150 uA to 180 uA

L136: \text{weak}
      "the experimental" -> "experimental"

L137: "from from" -> "from"

L153:  periodical -> periodic

Eq.3: \text{det} \text{exp)

L159: $A_{\text{exp}}$

L161,162: \text{det}

L167: \text{weak}

L170: "Tab. I" -> "Table I"

L172: "Tab. I" -> "Table I"

L179: "electrons" -> "electron" or reomve electrons.  As written it is
      is saying that quasi-elastic electrons scatter on Al.  They don't
      become "quasi-elastic electrons" until they scatter on the Al.

L182: \text{exp}

L193: dependance -> dependence

Eq4: \text{tot} \text{exp}

L198: \text{th}  (I think)

L200: All subscripts except Q^2 in roman

L201: \text{re}

L203: \text{det}

L204: \text{bin}

L208: Tab -> Table

L211: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein  (I think)

L212: Tab -> Table

L216: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein
      DVVC -> DVVS (or DVCS?)

L230: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein

Fig 2: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein

L230: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein

L240: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein

L249: "on the" -> "to the"
      "ep" -> "$ep$"

L250: ep -> $ep$   $\mu p$

L251: $Q^2$

L252: Too much space after "No."  Use ~   No.~DEAC...

L260: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein

L303: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein

L308: Gorchtein -> Gorchstein
      (And more places)

L309, L310:  Be consistent on "Qweak"

References: Journal names need spaces in them

	    "Phys.Rev.Lett." -> "Phys. Rev. Lett."