<div dir="ltr"><br><div class="gmail_quote">---------- Forwarded message ----------<br>From: <b class="gmail_sendername">Spayde, Damon</b> <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:Spayde@hendrix.edu">Spayde@hendrix.edu</a>></span><br>Date: Mon, Oct 13, 2014 at 1:11 PM<br>Subject: Re: [Qweak_bnssa_elastic_ep_authors] Final draft of the elastic ep transverse paper - Comments due by October 17th, 2014<br>To: Buddhini Waidyawansa <<a href="mailto:buddhini@jlab.org">buddhini@jlab.org</a>><br>Cc: "Spayde, Damon" <<a href="mailto:Spayde@hendrix.edu">Spayde@hendrix.edu</a>><br><br><br>
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<div>Hi, Buddhini,</div>
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<div>Thanks for your hard work on this paper. I found a few typos and/or grammatical/style issues in the paper that might warrant fixing.</div>
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<div>Line 113: Rather than “On the contrary” I think something like “However” or “On the other hand” would read better.</div>
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<div>Line 153: “Periodic” rather than “periodical”.</div>
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<div>Line 161: The definition of phi_det is rather confusing. It sort of sounds like it is in a different plane from phi_s the way it is written. Perhaps something like “phi_s (phi_det) is the azimuthal angle of P (detector) about the beam axis”? Or perhaps
include the location of zero angle like you do in the Figure 1 caption.</div>
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<div>Line 188: I would recommend “no asymmetry correction” rather than “no correction”. You might also want to combine it with the previous sentence. You might need to expand on the comment about dilutions on the next line – maybe by making an explicit reference
to Eq. 4.</div>
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<div>Line 212-213: I would move the line about “Only one calculation shows a clear agreement with this measurement” down to the end of this paragraph.</div>
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<div>Line 216: I don’t think “Optical theorem” should be capitalized.</div>
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<div>Line 221: I would insert a “the” before “A. Afanasev” and turn “model” into “models” on the following line.</div>
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<div>Line 223: I would insert a “the” before “B. Pasquini”.</div>
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<div>Line 250: Insert a “on” between “corrections” and “ep”.</div>
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<div>Line 250-251: You use “TPE” several times in a very short span here. I might suggest replacing the last one in this sentence with “different”.</div>
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<div>Regards,</div>
<div>Damon</div><span class="HOEnZb"><font color="#888888">
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