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Dear all,
       I have received the reviewers' comments on the NIM paper. Below you
can find them. Most of them are forwards minor edits. I will take care of
implementing them and will keep you posted if I need help with any specific
point.

Best regards,
Mohammad Hattawy.

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To: Mohammad Khaled Hattawy <mohammad.hattawy at gmail.com>

Ms. Ref. No.: *NIMA-D-23-01183*
Title: Design, Construction, and Performance of the GEM based Radial Time
Projection Chamber for the BONuS12 Experiment with CLAS12
Nuclear Inst. and Methods in Physics Research, A

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Reviewers' comments:

Reviewer #1: The paper "Design, Construction, and Performance of the GEM
based Radial Time Projection Chamber for the BONuS12 Experiment with
CLAS12" is very neat and very detailed, well written, with good drawings
and pictures. It describes an original detector, characterized by an axial
magnetic field and a radial electric field, which is not the usual
configuration of a Time Projection Chamber (TPC), where usually the
electric field is parallel to the magnetic field. This characteristics
imply a strong deviation of the drifting electrons due to the Lorentz force
and complicates the reconstruction.

In Fig.2 and lines 202 and 221, the up stream and down stream field cages
should be rather named field shapers. This also holds for Fig. 9 caption
and line 718.
Line 348, it is not clear what is meant by a 'capacitance method' to cut
the foil.
Line 546, 20 W of energy should be replaced by 20 W of power.

The description of the reconstruction software is the weak point of the
paper. The fact that the conversion time to radius is given by Eq. (1)
demonstrated by simulations is not very satisfactory (lines 692 and
following). The same for Eq.(2). These formulae should be given by
equations of mechanics and electrostatics.

The momentum correction for energy loss is also a bit puzzling. Fig. 22
shows that this correction can be quite large, and the parameters a_0 and
a_1 of the correction formula Eq.(3) are ambiguous : the exponentials are
exp(-5) and exp(-6) or exp (-0.5) and exp(-0.6) ?

Line 880 to 884 should be checked or more explicit : 'non-perfect control
over running conditions'.

Despite these minor remarks or questions, this paper is definitely of high
quality and should be accepted for publication in NIM A.

Reviewer #2: Dear Authors,

This article is written in a well-understandable English. The article deals
with the development, the commissioning, and characterization of a radial
TPC based on GEM technology. A detailed description of the instrument
(detectors, mechanics and electronics) is made.
This article will be a reference for the BONuS12 experiment in the future
publications.

A very minor revision of this paper has to be done, and the comments and
corrections listed below have to be considered before publication.

General remarks and writing comments:
- The numerous uses of the third pronoun like "we" are not clearly
specified in the style guide's recommendations of NIMA which are the same
as APS for Physics (https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__cdn.journals.aps.org_files_styleguide-2Dpr.pdf&d=DwIFaQ&c=CJqEzB1piLOyyvZjb8YUQw&r=CJm6DhRcoX04MjTsHQ1rOaz5dKcjlcAdQlzenFZzaP4&m=862tkuIEZq-EAkqciJ_Y4zILeEqlXgcd2dRnNDmSZSYqyXwbR4Om8kFx0zCVJB6i&s=xbfsoozaWBflhohw4wYwmYG3xWbduNkuUwrrQueX-GY&e= ).
But usually, in Academic articles, it should stay low. In section 4.8, the
pronoun "we" is too much used.
- Always put a space between the numbers and the units (when it is a
letter) i.e. in L. 300 (400 V)

Corrections:
- L. 89: a period is missing at the end of the sentence.
- L. 223: you may replace the "drift gas" by the "RTPC gas"
- L. 262: "Fig. 7 shows examples of GEM foils considered to pass (top) or
to fail (bottom) the optical inspection."
- L. 298: "using another puller assembly." If this is the case, adding
"another" will help the understanding of the assembly step.
- L. 340: One word "with" needs to be removed.
- L. 385: "Finally, the cathode assembly was inserted into the detector in
consecutive small steps as shown in Fig. 13."
- L. 445: for CO2, please use CO$_2$.
- L. 465: ...the target was emptied and refilled three times...
- Fig. 15 and L. 1166 : replace MicroMEGAS by the Micromegas.
- L. 495: Hitachi micro-coaxial cables. Please give a manufacturer
reference code.
- L. 504: Hitachi MEC8 cables: the cables are from Hitachi, but the MEC8
connector is from Samtec. No MEC8 connector is present on this cable. Here,
this is not clear. Remove MEC8 or be more specific.
- L. 509: Each FEU is composed of eight Samtec MEC8 input connectors....
- L. 540-542: "...DREAM chip inputs is estimated and subtracted on a
per-chip basis, and last, the signal is zero suppressed on a per-channel
basis." Both are considered here as adjectives.
- L. 545: "FEUs are powered by a 5 V source. Each FEU consumes 20 W."
- L. 549: "A continuous flow of air is necessary to cool the FEUs at room
temperature within the crates."
- L. 659: "However, real tracks might be falsely separated..."
- L. 676: "... in three dimensions is to..."
- L. 723: "... the first-order approach...". As it is considered here as an
adjective.
- L. 730: "... the z-axis can be ignored as a good approximation, but the
energy loss of the charged particle ..."
- L. 733: "The helix fitter used is a modified form..."
- L. 851 and 852: Please be specific with parameters A, B and C. For
instance: a_t(z) = A_t + B_t z^2 + C_t z^4 and a_\phi(z) = A_\phit + B_\phi
z^2 + C_\phi z^4
- L. 853: "... the results for the drift time $t$ and the angle $\theta_L$,
respectively."
- L. 861: "Like for the drift region, the steps in the same z-positions are
repeated and fitted these simulated data results with similar second-order
polynomials in z² and the corresponding coefficients A, B, and C were
extracted."
- In Fig. 24, 25, 26 & 27: please, precise in the legends that "Data"
corresponds to "MC data".
- Fig. 31, 32 & 33 could be optimized with higher quality.
- L. 983: "Additionally, the right plot in this figure shows..."
- L. 1029: "overpressure"
- L. 1031: "photomultiplier". Please don't hyphenate words unnecessarily.
- L. 1034: "... a set of venting pumps was installed upstream of the
detector..."
- L. 1036: "... to remove the leaking helium and discharge it outside Hall
B."
- L. 1051: "... different layers oof the HV system to protec...". Remove
"in order to" to avoid wordiness.
- L. 1063: Remove space in "i.e." expression.
- L. 1086: "... was sent through the target cell. Then, the beam..."
- L. 1105: "... suppressing single-hit noise." As it is considered here as
an adjective.
- L. 1120: "... was changed frequently while maintaining the purity of each
gas type."
- L. 1139: "At this point, the D_2..."
- L. 1149: "... high-rate ..."
- L. 1153: "... high-energy ..."

Comments: Be more specific with the numbers, see below:
- L. 36: How much does this design reduce the inactive area of the RTPC?
- L. 89: Please, give the thickness of the thin cylindrical cathode foil.
- L. 117: Please give the thickness of the aluminized layer?
- Fig. 3: You should modify this figure to add the numbers corresponding to
the description in the text (from L. 137 to L. 153).
- Tab. 1: In caption: add a space between "dimensions" and the reference
[7].
- L. 189: how much space for isolation? Please specify.
- L. 197: you could add "(see Fig. 2)." at the end of the sentence.
- L. 568: add "... view of RTPC at 1.7 T magnetic field."
- Fig. 27: why the MC data for z=10 cm are inconsistent with the fitting
curve compared to the other MC data points?

Best regards,

The reviewer

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