[Clas_hadron] DPG 2016

[Reinhard Schumacher]

Dear Cathrina,

Here are a few comments about your abstract.

You need a title, first and foremost.

The first sentence should be something that tells the reader something 
about what you actually did, not a bland statement about CLAS in general.

"photon scattering" is not correct word usage.  You are not scattering 
photons.  Probably you want to use the word "photoproduction".   This 
second sentence would be better if you use it as your first sentence.

"The main goal..." sentence can be removed:  it is content free.

"...gluonic bound state, because..."  remove the comma.   If you were 
writing in German it would be appropriate, but not in English usage.

Cheers,
Reinhard

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Reinhard Schumacher         Department of Physics, 5000 Forbes Ave.
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On 12/10/2015 02:22 AM, Cathrina Sowa wrote:
> Hello,
>
> I would like to attent the DPG2016. It is a national german Conference 
> and it would be a contributing talk of 12+3 min.
> I attached an abstract and would be happy about comments.
>
> Thank you.
>
> Best regards
> Cathrina
>
>
>
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