[Clascomment] OPT-IN: A comparison of forward and backward pp pair knockout in 3He(e, e'pp)n

[Larry Weinstein]

Dear Dan,

Thanks for the note.  The wrong paper is linked on the opt-in page.  It 
should point to
http://www.jlab.org/Hall-B/secure/e2/weinstei/tensorcorr/PrcForwardBackSrc5.pdf
which is the December 22 version of the paper.

I am cc-ing Ken Hicks so he can fix it.

- Larry

Daniel Carman wrote:
> 					January 19, 2012
>
>
> Dear Hovhannes and Larry,
>
> I have read through your most recently SRC paper and include my comments below.
> The paper seems to be in good shape so my list is relatively short and includes
> some grammar/style/wording issues that I found in my reading. Let me know if you
> have any questions. Note that the version of the paper that was linked on the
> CLAS review website was dated Aug. 5, 2011.
>
> 			   Regards,
>
> 				  Daniel
>
> ********************************************************************
> General:
>   - You are not consistent in this paper with speed of light units c. Either let
>     c=1 everywhere or follow consistent notation throughout.
>
> Page 1:
>   Abtract.
>    Line 3. Use "... experiments by detecting both ...".
>   Left column.
>    Line 3. "Nucleons in a SRC are comparatively short distances ..." is not a proper
>     statement. Please revisit.
>
> Page 2:
>   Left column.
>    Paragraph 1.
>     Line 5. I suggest a clearer notation for omega. How about "$\omega = E_e - E_{e'}$"?
>     Line 12. Use "... two nuclei with $p>  0.275~GeV/c$, and is thus ...".
>    Paragraph 2.
>     Line 2. I suggest "Existing measurements of ...".
>     Line 3. Use "... pp)n$ have looked at events where ...".
>     Line 9. Use "These measurements are complicated by the strong ...".
>     Line 10. What are "continuum-state interactions"?
>   Right column.
>    Paragraph 4.
>     Here you mention that the EC was used for the electron trigger. Was the CC not used in
>     this run period for electron triggering as well?
>
> Page 3:
>   Left column.
>    Fig. 2 caption.
>     Line 7. Use "... the data and the straight line ...".
>   Right column.
>    Fig. 4 caption.
>     Line 2. Missing units on p-slow momentum.
>    Paragraph 2.
>     Line 4. Here you refer to the diagrammatic calculation by Laget. A reference is needed here.
>
> Page 4:
>   Left column.
>    Paragraph 3.
>     Line 1. I suggest "The theoretical cross sections show in this work have been ...".
>    Paragraph 4.
>     Line 2. Use "... associated with the ...".
>     Line 5. Typo on "MEC".
>     Line 10. Use "... the third being a spectator.".
>    Paragraph 5.
>     Line 4. Use "$s$-wave".
>   Right column.
>    Paragraph 2.
>     Line 4. Use "... $s$-wave, which has ...".
>    Paragraph 3.
>     Line 5. Use "... is emitted backward relative to the momentum transfer, ...".
>    Fig. 6 caption.
>     Line 2. Remove comma.
>     Line 3. Remove comma.
>     Line 5. Use "... the data and the histograms ...". (Typo on "histograms".)
>
> Page 5:
>   Left column.
>    Paragraph 1.
>     Line 2. Use "... are emitted forward.".
>     Line 6. Use "$\Delta$".
>     Line 9. Use "... emitted forward, they have smaller ...".
>   Right column.
>    Last paragraph.
>     Line 1. Use "... the large kinematic coverage of CLAS ...".
>
> Page 6:
>   Left column.
>    Paragraph 1.
>     Line 4 and 6. Use "$\Delta$".
>     Line 8. Use "... emitted backwards, each of these interaction effects is much ... becomes more
>      sensitive to ...".
>    Paragraph 2.
>     This begins "This indicates that short range ...". I recommend that this sentence be made part
>     of the previous paragraph.
>   References.
>    Ref. 1 - this is incomplete. Is this a conference proceedings. If so, give the full
>     name and the editors.
>    Ref. 4 - Update year to 2012.
>    Ref. 13 - Should be "B.A. Mecking".

-- 
				Sincerely,
				Larry

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Lawrence Weinstein
University Professor
Physics Department
Old Dominion University
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