[Frost] Brian's NStar writeup

[Eugene Pasyuk]

H Brian,

A few comments.

Title: symmetry ->asymmetry
FROST: use all capitals

Introduction: Current models -> Quark models
In the third and fourth statements style problem. You use "required" 
"require" too close to each other. Replace one of them with something else.
"Unique" is not appropriate word there. We usually say "carefully 
chosen". This is a quote from the paper.

Experiment: within -> in
Experimental Hall-B -> experimental Hall-B (Don't capitalize experimental)

"proton spin sate aligned..." is redundant. You already said in the same 
sentence that it was either parallel or anti-parallel.

Results:
In Eq. (1) you missed target polarization.
Fig 3: add horizontal line at 0, remove small ticks on axes.


Before you submit your paper for proceedings you need to get approval 
from the speakers committee.

-Eugene


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On 7/27/11 17:37 , Brian Morrison wrote:
> Hey All,
>
> The writeup for my talk from NStar can be found at:
>
> http://www.jlab.org/Hall-B/secure/g9/morrison/NStar2011_Morrison.pdf
>
> Let me know if there is anything that needs to be addressed in it.  If
> everyone is OK with it I will submit it on friday.
>
> -Brian
>
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