[Frost] Brian's NStar writeup

[Eugene Pasyuk]

A few more suggestions.

Fig 1 has no axes labels! I would also remove all minor ticks on all plots.
Fig 2. Horizontal axis is not labeled. It also needs tag "preliminary".
Fig 3 can be optimized. The all have the same horizontal axis. You can 
stack them without gaps and leave numbers only for the plot at the very 
bottom. Tah way you will get more of useful area

-Eugene

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On 7/27/11 22:48 , Eugene Pasyuk wrote:
> H Brian,
>
> A few comments.
>
> Title: symmetry ->asymmetry
> FROST: use all capitals
>
> Introduction: Current models ->  Quark models
> In the third and fourth statements style problem. You use "required"
> "require" too close to each other. Replace one of them with something else.
> "Unique" is not appropriate word there. We usually say "carefully
> chosen". This is a quote from the paper.
>
> Experiment: within ->  in
> Experimental Hall-B ->  experimental Hall-B (Don't capitalize experimental)
>
> "proton spin sate aligned..." is redundant. You already said in the same
> sentence that it was either parallel or anti-parallel.
>
> Results:
> In Eq. (1) you missed target polarization.
> Fig 3: add horizontal line at 0, remove small ticks on axes.
>
>
> Before you submit your paper for proceedings you need to get approval
> from the speakers committee.
>
> -Eugene
>
>
> ................................
> Eugene Pasyuk
> Jefferson Laboratory, B107
> 12000 Jefferson Avenue, Ste. 5
> Newport News, VA 23606
> Phone: +1(757)269-6020
> FAX:   +1(757)269-5800
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>
>
> On 7/27/11 17:37 , Brian Morrison wrote:
>> Hey All,
>>
>> The writeup for my talk from NStar can be found at:
>>
>> http://www.jlab.org/Hall-B/secure/g9/morrison/NStar2011_Morrison.pdf
>>
>> Let me know if there is anything that needs to be addressed in it.  If
>> everyone is OK with it I will submit it on friday.
>>
>> -Brian
>>
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