[Frost] Brian's NStar writeup

[Barry Ritchie]

Actually, since the proper name is John J. Domingo Experimental Hall B,
"experimental" does need to be capitalized. But we could probably just
go with Hall B (no hyphen). 

---BGR

Professor  Barry G. Ritchie 
Department of Physics 
Arizona State University 
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From: frost-bounces at jlab.org [mailto:frost-bounces at jlab.org] On Behalf
Of Eugene Pasyuk
Sent: Thursday, July 28, 2011 6:30 AM
To: frost at jlab.org
Subject: Re: [Frost] Brian's NStar writeup

A few more suggestions.

Fig 1 has no axes labels! I would also remove all minor ticks on all
plots.
Fig 2. Horizontal axis is not labeled. It also needs tag "preliminary".
Fig 3 can be optimized. The all have the same horizontal axis. You can 
stack them without gaps and leave numbers only for the plot at the very 
bottom. Tah way you will get more of useful area

-Eugene

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Eugene Pasyuk
Jefferson Laboratory, B107
12000 Jefferson Avenue, Ste. 5
Newport News, VA 23606
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On 7/27/11 22:48 , Eugene Pasyuk wrote:
> H Brian,
>
> A few comments.
>
> Title: symmetry ->asymmetry
> FROST: use all capitals
>
> Introduction: Current models ->  Quark models
> In the third and fourth statements style problem. You use "required"
> "require" too close to each other. Replace one of them with something
else.
> "Unique" is not appropriate word there. We usually say "carefully
> chosen". This is a quote from the paper.
>
> Experiment: within ->  in
> Experimental Hall-B ->  experimental Hall-B (Don't capitalize
experimental)
>
> "proton spin sate aligned..." is redundant. You already said in the
same
> sentence that it was either parallel or anti-parallel.
>
> Results:
> In Eq. (1) you missed target polarization.
> Fig 3: add horizontal line at 0, remove small ticks on axes.
>
>
> Before you submit your paper for proceedings you need to get approval
> from the speakers committee.
>
> -Eugene
>
>
> ................................
> Eugene Pasyuk
> Jefferson Laboratory, B107
> 12000 Jefferson Avenue, Ste. 5
> Newport News, VA 23606
> Phone: +1(757)269-6020
> FAX:   +1(757)269-5800
> ................................
>
>
> On 7/27/11 17:37 , Brian Morrison wrote:
>> Hey All,
>>
>> The writeup for my talk from NStar can be found at:
>>
>> http://www.jlab.org/Hall-B/secure/g9/morrison/NStar2011_Morrison.pdf
>>
>> Let me know if there is anything that needs to be addressed in it.
If
>> everyone is OK with it I will submit it on friday.
>>
>> -Brian
>>
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