[G12] g12 paper ready for Ad Hoc

[Michael C. Kunkel]

Greetings Ken,


Here are some of my suggestions.

Abstract;

Second sentence: However, there exists no ... -> However, *currently* 
there exists no...

Last sentence: is associated with t channel ...->is associated with *a* 
t channel production mechanism.   OR is associated with t channel 
production mechanism*s*.


Introduction;

Second paragraph: Its mentions that of all the f0, only two can belong 
to the meson scalar nonet. For us laymen, can you add which two you are 
referring to?

Third paragraph: 3rd sentence starts out as Models based..... and then 
this sentence proceeds 7 lines. Can this sentence be broken into 2 or 3?


Experimental Setup;

Maybe instead of "struck a thin gold foil..."-> "struck gold foil of 
10^-4 radiation lengths..."

... initial energy with a photon energy resolution of a few MeV. -> 
initial energy with a photon energy resolution < 7.6 MeV (I think the 
largest paddle overlap lead to this, but Eugene would know for sure).


Timing Cut;

Near the bottom of page 2, its written 'good', in single quotes. I think 
it should be double quotes "good". Unless you are using British English?


Figure 3 caption;

I am always confused on whether its 2-pion or two-pion. However, if 
either are adequate, then maybe stick with your paper convention... 
two-pion.


Im not sure what the target journal is, but the figure axis titles and 
fonts are different throughtout the paper. Moreover, I find Figure 4's 
axis a bit of an eye strain.


Otherwise, I think it well written.


LLAP


BR
MK
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Michael C. Kunkel, USMC, PhD
Forschungszentrum Jülich
Nuclear Physics Institute and Juelich Center for Hadron Physics
Experimental Hadron Structure (IKP-1)
www.fz-juelich.de/ikp

On 04/05/2017 22:44, Hicks, Kenneth wrote:
> Dear g12 group,
>
> I have posted on the g12 wiki a link to the paper that Shloka and I 
> wrote on the search for scalar mesons (KsKs p final state). Please 
> send me your comments by Monday morning.  I'm going to request an Ad 
> Hoc committee from Jerry Gilfoyle and so I'd like to hear and 
> suggestions/comments on this paper without delay.
>
> Here's a direct link if you prefer:
> https://www.jlab.org/Hall-B/secure/g12/hicks/CLAS-KsKs-AdHoc.pdf
>
>
> Best regards,
> Ken
>
>
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